Writing two paragraphs:
From now on, in your writing assignments, you will write two paragraphs about one prompt. Each paragraph will respond to the same prompt with a different controlling idea. Then you will develop each paragraph by giving general and specific support about the controlling idea. You will follow the same format as you did in WA# 1.
You want to include some type of transition between the two paragraphs to show that they are related to each other. See my examples about gender inequality. Notice that the topic sentences respond to the prompt and have their own controlling idea.
For example:
Prompt: Is there gender inequality in your native country?
There is gender inequality in the U.S. in how men and women are treated differently in the workplace.
Another type of gender inequality in the U.S. happens in homes in the expected roles of husbands and wives.
Or: Along with different treatment at work, men and women in the US also suffer from gender inequality in the home in their expected roles of husbands and wives.
Or: A second type of gender inequality in the US has to do with expected roles of husbands and wives in the home.
***Or: Not only is there gender inequality at work in the US, but it can also be found in homes with the expected roles of husbands and wives.
Practice: Figure out a topic sentence for the second paragraph in each example. Make sure that you use a transition phrase to show that the paragraphs are connected to each other.
Prompt: Why did you choose De Anza College?
One reason I chose De Anza College is its high transfer rate.
The second reason that I chose De Anza college is because my friends recommended it to me.
Another reason to study at De Anza is the high quality of education.
Sample for writing two paragraphs
Is social networking helpful or harmful?
Social networking is detrimental to society because it can make people depressed. People tend to feel intimidated or even isolated by comparing their lives to others’ when the others post pictures or write something on their status. Considering people are inclined to upload pictures of their happy moments or write things they want to brag about, no wonder people start to become skeptical about their lives, thinking that they are not having a good time nor enjoying their lives as others. In “Social Networking Makes Twits of Us All,” Maria Quinlan said that it’s not difficult for people to manipulate and create the life they want for their online friends. Therefore, it appears to a lot of people that everybody is happy except for themselves. For instance, I used to have Facebook when I was in high school. It seemed as though everyone else was having more fun than me and leading such interesting lives. One day at the end of summer, I was scrolling through my Facebook and I saw pictures of my friends’ vacations to beautiful places all around the world. I had stayed home all summer and felt so left out. I felt sad when I compared my life to my friends’ lives. Therefore, I decided to delete my Facebook account, and after a while, I began to feel better and happier about the life I was living. In a nutshell, the sadness which is caused by social networking is harmful. (244 words)
Original sentence from the article: Electronic relationships make it easy for “friends” to misrepresent themselves-always showing their best side, for instance.
Along with causing depression, social networking is harmful in the way that it can lead to cyber-bullying.Cyber-bullying occurs when people post negative and cruel comments on others’ posts. These comments are often very severe because of the fact that the posters are online and not face-to face with the person they are bullying. Besides, the major characteristic of social networking is that things spread so quickly, whether it’s unreliable or not. If you think about these two features of social networking, you will easily be able to come to a conclusion that social networking actually contributes to cyber-bullying. According to “Social Networking Makes Twits of Us All,” Maria Quinlan noted that anonymity entices people to bring their dark side out. In other words, people get easily motivated to write false information, cruel remarks, or rumors that might affect someone’s reputation. To specify this, my friend, Jihyun, was cyber bullied on Facebook for what she hadn’t done. She couldn’t help but just look at those harsh comments. Because things got spread too quickly, she couldn’t make it stop or take an actual action on it. She stopped going to school for a couple of weeks because she got so upset by what the bully had said about her. Therefore, due to online harassment, social networking can be harmful. (214 words)
Original sentence from the article: Anonymity also allows darker impulses to flourish.
Think about the topic sentences and the concluding sentences for each paragraph. What do you notice about these sentences?
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